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Each Thursday, she wraps herself in knee-high socks, tall boots, and a heavy, white coat. Nothing else. Each large button on the coat is like a perfect antique coin that she traces, wanting to imprint its value on her fingertips. Then, the satin lining a secret next to her body, she takes the bus to an industrial district, where he is waiting to paint.

He always aligns his paints by the visible spectrum, from red to violet. She comes to him colorless, clean, in a white coat. He knows each shadow of her body, each gleaming highlight; he thinks of her body by regions. The desperate, hungry stripes between her ribs; the indigo calm of her lower back; the shy pink under her knees. He paints a city across her. Angry red bridges, orange nipples, silent white lips.

She says nothing because she is being mapped, organized, and her own thoughts would interrupt with their squiggles of chaos.

All Thursday, every Thursday, she stands for hours, following the patterns of herself. And all Thursday he paints, marveling over an entire metropolis of skin. All night she studies the mirror, the beautiful order of shapes, until her eyes are too exhausted to open.

Every Friday morning she washes herself back into disparate parts, fastens up her coat and boots, and walks out—completely unmarked—into a crowd.
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Feb. 2007.

Disparate does not = desperate... look it up ;-)

They really need a poetic essay or poetic prose category here. Anyway, I strongly believe it is content, not line breaks, that classifies a poem, so I put it in poetry.
Daily Deviation, 2007-03-06

Daily DeviationStripes by ~opaquediaphanousness is a romantic lyrical moment full of vividness, expressed as a prose poem. (Suggested by =wildmonky and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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Bit of a lame comment from me but.. that was pretty neat :D

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Expect the worst, accept the worst, demand the worst.
i like how you made the knees pink and the nipples orange. i woulda done the opposite. =p

Yet another :+fav:. I love the tone and just how smooth this is to read.

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I completely agree with the poetic prose section, I have also had this thought.

This is gorgeousness. A snippet that rivets.
Many thanks! :hug: I have noticed you are a big user of the poetic prose yourself ;)
heh :hug: sometimes, sometimes dear.
Exactly. This is poetry due to the beautiful content, it doesn't need the specifics of a genre. Um, yeah.
This is beautiful, the style, and... just simply the words. I can't think of specific things or parts to compliment, as everything is so beautifully woven together that to judge one part is to judge it all, and it's all simply beautiful. I don't know what to say.

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Lovely prose poem! For me, it brought to mind some of Anais Nin's short stories about models and artists.

I like the subtle sensuality the piece starts with, her outfit. "Each large button on the coat is like a perfect antique coin that she traces, wanting to imprint its value on her fingertips." There was something very charming and innocent in that part for me, a bit childlike.

The way the body painting is described is so luscious. I loved "The desperate, hungry stripes between her ribs; the indigo calm of her lower back; the shy pink under her knees. He paints a city across her. Angry red bridges, orange nipples, silent white lips."

There's such an interesting dynamic between the model, the artist, and her body. She marvels at his work, but cleans herself of it. He is in awe of her body, but sees it in pieces.

I really enjoyed reading this piece. Congrats on the DD! :)

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Critiquing someone's prose or poetry is an awesome thing to do.
:star:The supremely awesome Mimesis 3 is available now!
Just... Wow. I can see why this was picked for a DD!

Sorry for the critique-less comment... I really shouldn't comment on things as good as this at nearly two in the morning.
exceptional, i love this. it's very beautiful and expressive and emotive, a pleasure to read.

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